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My first ever Sigma 6 Dio Story!
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Author:  Arashikage Assasin [ Sat Feb 23, 2008 10:57 pm ]
Post subject:  My first ever Sigma 6 Dio Story!
Introduction:
The battle between Gi joe and Cobra has gone on for a many years. But it has come to a halt, all of a sudden. Gi joe doesn't know it yet, but Cobra Commander and Destro have suddenly vanished.. No one knows where they went.

Ever since then, Gi joe has been searching for the remaining Power Stones. They've got all that have been reported, but only one remains......

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This is my first, so don't be too harsh! Let me know what you think though.. thanks!
Author:  Keenan [ Sun Feb 24, 2008 5:55 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: My first ever Sigma 6 Dio Story!
That's pretty good. Hope you're planning more.
Author:  Arashikage Assasin [ Sun Feb 24, 2008 7:33 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: My first ever Sigma 6 Dio Story!
Thanks JFAK! Yes, i plan to do more sometime.. i will post updates when they happen :)
Author:  captain tomorrow [ Thu Mar 06, 2008 3:41 am ]
Post subject:  Re: My first ever Sigma 6 Dio Story!
Great story!

I give it :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: out of :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: !
Author:  pluv [ Thu Mar 06, 2008 1:12 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: My first ever Sigma 6 Dio Story!
Since people read left to right, top to bottom you have to set the word bubbles up that way. Otherwise people will read things in the wrong order. If Storm Shadow is speaking first have him on the left side of the picture instead of the right. If Spirit is speaking to Duke (off screen) then have his word bubble on the left and Duke's on the right.

If Iron Man is supposed to be Dr. Mindbender you have to tell us that right off the bat. Otherwise we think Storm Shadow is talking Iron Man. We don't know Storm Shadow is talking to Dr. Mindbender in an armored suit until like 4 panels later. That's a pretty important plot point.

Otherwise I think you have a good beginning. Spirit, Storm Shadow, and Duke's characterization is what I would expect them to be. You have a good outline for where the story should go. If I had anything to add for suggestions it would be to incorporate more background filler. Mindbender could have some type of machinery or something to fill in space in the background. Since you're using different scaled lines you might want to try different angles and having figures off set from each other with bigger figures in the back and smaller figures toward the front so they don't look as jarringly out of scale.
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